Visdare 29–Dulce et Decorum Est


The cigarette dangled unlit. Angela stared down at the legs. Those hateful, alien, aluminium caricatures of human flesh. They weren’t even articulated. They were there simply to weigh her down, strapped immovably to the raw, bloody stumps of her thighs.

She had been determined to kill herself, that day by the rail tracks. She had not imagined that life could be any worse than it was. God, she had been stupid. This was far worse. This was hell.

“Let me die!” she had screamed. They had ignored her, as usual.

“I don’t want to be saved!” she had sobbed. He had ignored her. As usual.

And now she was a captive of her own body as well as her psychotically covetous husband.

No, she decided, no. One way or another she would escape this misery. She would never walk again. So be it. She would simply sit here and starve.


This is an entry for Angela Goff’s Visdare challenge.


150 words – or less, no erotica or graphic violence.


About wombat37

A Yorkshireman in the green hills of Lancashire, UK Not a real wombat, obviously, or typing would become an issue. I do have short legs and a hairy nose, however. Oh, & a distinctive smell.

Posted on July 18, 2013, in fiction, Photograph, Short story, story, Visdare, Writings. Bookmark the permalink. 6 Comments.

  1. Just doing mine but that is bl**dy awesome. Well done you and welcome..xx


  2. Brilliant piece! Well done. Love that you see her legs as aluminum!!


  3. She definitely looks sad enough…poor thing. Great stuff!


  4. I think one reason I stuck with my first marriage as long as I did is that my ex husband at least wasn't one of those abusively covetous ones. Desperation and suicide ideation are things some people know all too well. Good job of making them come to life in this piece.


  5. Powerfully penned Wombat and strangely enough I thought when I first saw her legs – they didn't seem real – nice take on the pic.


  6. YOWCH. Brisk and powerful. Somehow it conjured up echoes of Ethan Frome – but this is so much more keen-edged and pointed. So glad you jumped on the VisDare train – can't wait to have more wombatery action in the VisDare ranks with future challenges! 😀


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